Would you rather be a very rich person with no serious relationship with other people or a poor pers
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I would choose to be a rich person with no serious relationship with other people. Because, lots of stress comes from human relationships. Actually Many problems can be solved through money. But, It also can make some stress. Many rich people who I can see on movies get lots of stress from relationship. So, I think that when I am rick person without serious relationship, I am a lucky person. And, I am a software engineer. I can feel happy in the process of developing the program. As well, if I have lots of money, I never get stress while developing the program. When I release a program, I consider thousand times about that how many people want to my program, how much money can I make through this program. Sometimes It makes me crazy.
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I would choose to be a rich person with no serious relationship with other people.
>> Correct.
Because, lots of stress comes from human relationships.
>> It is because lots of stress comes from human relationships.
Actually Many problems can be solved through money.
>> Actually many problems can be solved through money.
But, It also can make some stress.
>> But, it also can also cause some stress.
Many rich people who I can see on movies get lots of stress from relationship.
>> Many rich people who I see in movies get lots of stress from relationships.
So, I think that when I am rick person without serious relationship, I am a lucky person. And, I am a software engineer.
>> So, I think that when I am a rich person without a serious relationship, I am a lucky person. I already am a software engineer.
I can feel happy in the process of developing the program.
>> I can feel happy in the process of developing a program.
As well, if I have lots of money, I never get stress while developing a program.
>> And, if I have lots of money, I will never get stressed while developing the program.
When I release a program, I consider thousand times about that how many people want to my program, how much money can I make through this program.
>> When I release a program, I consider how many people will want to have my program, how much money can I make through it and such.
Sometimes It makes me crazy
>> It sometimes makes me crazy.
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