Would you rather be genius or rich?

2017-06-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lorna

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I have preferred to be rich over genius. Because I can have various opportunities and feel peace of mind for living. As an example, everyone often faces their dream which is changeable over [이름]e. They can immediately change their initiative right when it is determined. If he is not rich, it will be a obstacle to undergo himself even if he is genius. Our society requires process cost.

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Hi there [이름]^^, how are you doing? 

 Thank you for patiently answering your homework.

I really appreciate it. Keep up the good work. 


~~ Teacher Lorna




I have preferred to be rich over genius. Because I can have various opportunities and feel peace of mind for living.
>>   I prefer to be rich rather than to be a genius because when I am rich, I can have various opportunities and peace of mind for living.
As an example, everyone often faces their dream which is changeable over [이름]e.
>> As we can see, everyone chases their own dream even when this changes as [이름]es goes on.
They can immediately change their initiative right when it is determined.
>> They can immediately change their strategies when they are determined.
 If he is not rich, it will be a obstacle to undergo himself even if he is genius.
>> If the person is not rich then it will be so hard for him to do what he wants even when he is a genius.
Our society requires process cost.
>> Our society requires  costs  in everything we do.

   

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