Would you rather be rich and unhappy or poor and happy?
학생이 쓴 원문
I choose that be poor and happy. Recently, I saw a lot of rich people who feel unhappy. So, they usually commit or fell into the wrong way. I think happiness is the driving force to get power to do something and also It can give a challenge to try everything. Although, we fail doing something, happiness can give the power to rise again. Despite they get lots of money, they are thinking about aren\'t happy, that\'s a big problem of the life. Money can give many chance to do but It can\'t give happiness. So, the poor people who feel happy has the biggest power more than rich people. Actually, the reason why do we gather the money is for be happy. Thus, I choose \'poor and happy\'. (Sorry, I can\'t write 10 sentences...I did best one can 😢)
강사 첨삭
Hey Sarah! You did a great job! You were worried that you weren\'t able to make 10 sentences but you actually did, so job well done! I agree with your answer, happiness is more important than money. I\', looking forward to your next writing task! Have a great weekend!^^
~~~Teacher Ryka^^
>>> I choose to be poor and happy.
Recently, I saw a lot of rich people who feel unhappy.
>>> Recently, I\'ve seen a lot of rich people who are unhappy.
So, they usually commit or fell into the wrong way.
>>> So, they usually fall on to the wrong things.
I think happiness is the driving force to get power to do something and also It can give a challenge to try everything.
>>> I think happiness is the driving force to motivate and challenge someone to do or start something.
Although, we fail doing something, happiness can give the power to rise again.
>>> Although we fail, happiness can motivate us to rise again.
Despite they get lots of money, they are thinking about aren\'t happy, that\'s a big problem of the life.
>>> Despite having lots of money, they feel unhappy which is a big problem in life.
Money can give many chance to do but It can\'t give happiness.
>>> Money can give you opportunities but it can\'t give happiness.
So, the poor people who feel happy has the biggest power more than rich people.
>>> So, poor people who are happy have the advantage over the rich people.
Actually, the reason why do we gather the money is for be happy.
>>> Actually, the reason why we earn money is for us to be happy.
Thus, I choose \'poor and happy\'.
>>> Thus, I choose to be \"poor and happy.\"
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