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2014-05-16 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I think it's true that we only have developed technological progress that makes things convenient and us feel comfortable. There is no technological process for environment. Actually, I heard someone present about trash islands yesterday. Do you know that there are two trash islands on the earth? Some strange fish which had plastic particles inside their body had been found and researchers found two trash islands in the sea. One is twice bigger than Texas and the other is six times bigger than Korea. They are composed of 80% of plastic trash. The presenter said they are becoming trouble because sea birds or fishes are being dead because of suffocation and starvation. They are trying to eat floating trash because they think the trash as their food. Also, floating free nets which also take up trash islands make sea animals get hurt. Sadly, these trash island are getting bigger and bigger because of the gyre that has little wind but high pressure. So the presnter recommend us to do recycl

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 Whoa! Your ideas are overflowing there is no space to write on^^ Thanks for this one, [이름]! May you have a blast this weekend with the people you love~ See you on Monday! I think it\'s true that we only have developed technological progress that makes things convenient and us feel comfortable. >>I think it\'s true that we only have developed technology that makes things convenient and us feel comfortable.  There is no technological process for environment. >>There is no technological progress made for the environment. Actually, I heard someone present about trash islands yesterday. >>CORRECT! Do you know that there are two trash islands on the earth? >>CORRECT! >>Are you aware that there are two trash islands on the earth? Some strange fish which had plastic particles inside their body had been found and researchers found two trash islands in the sea. >>Some strange fishes which had plastic particles inside their body had been found and researchers found two trash islands in the sea.  One is twice bigger than Texas and the other is six times bigger than Korea. >>CORRECT! They are composed of 80% of plastic trash. >>They are composed of 80% plastic trash. The presenter said they are becoming trouble because sea birds or fishes are being dead because of suffocation and starvation. >>The presenter said it is becoming a trouble because sea birds or fishes die of suffocation and starvation. They are trying to eat floating trash because they think the trash as their food. >>They are trying to eat floating trash because they think trash as their food.  Also, floating free nets which also take up trash islands make sea animals get hurt. >>Also, floating nets which also take up trash islands hurt marine animals. Sadly, these trash island are getting bigger and bigger because of the gyre that has little wind but high pressure. >>Sadly, these trash islands are getting bigger and bigger because of the gyre that has little wind but high pressure. So the presnter recommend us to do recycl >>So the presenter recommended us to recycle.

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