Write about a memorable experience you had with a favorite family member.
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When I visited Australia by trip, I had day tour. That time, Our family went to sea to see dolphins. But It wasn\'t an aquarium, so It was possible that We couldn\'t meet dolphins. The weather was good. I couldn\'t find any clouds in the sky. Sea water was calm. After 30 minutes from going out to see dolphins, we met lots of dolphins. The guide said, \"Today, lots of dolphins come here to show their body to us.\". When I saw dolphin\'s powerful swimming, I thought they greet us.
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Hello [이름]ny!
This is such an amazing memory to keep, thank you for sharing it with me! ^_^
Take care always and see you on our next class
~T. Angelica
When I visited Australia by trip, I had day tour. >> When I went on a trip to Australia, I had a day tour.
That time, Our family went to sea to see dolphins.
>> For the day tour, our family went out to sea to see the dolphins.
But It wasn\'t an aquarium, so It was possible that We couldn\'t meet dolphins.
>>Since it wasn\'t an aquarium, it was possible that we wouldn\'t meet the dolphins if they don\'t show up.
The weather was good.
>> CORRECT
I couldn\'t find any clouds in the sky. Sea water was calm.
>> I couldn\'t find any clouds in the sky and the sea was calm.
After 30 minutes from going out to see dolphins, we met lots of dolphins.
>>After 30 minutes on the boat, lots of dolphins appeared.
The guide said, \"Today, lots of dolphins come here to show their body to us.\".
>> CORRECT.
When I saw dolphin\'s powerful swimming, I thought they greet us.
>> When I saw the dolphins\' powerful swimming, I thought it was their way of greeting us.
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