Write about a memorable holiday experience.

2024-09-24 · 첨삭 강사 Ryka

학생이 쓴 원문

My brother\'s familiy live in Philippines now, however until few years ago, my brother\'s familiy lived in Korea. So, my familiy enjoyed together every holiday like a Chu-Seok. I took care of my nephews and neices. It was a happy memories.

강사 첨삭

Hello! I\'m so glad you made the effort to finish the homework. You did an outstanding job expressing your thoughts—keep up the excellent work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^


My brother\'s familiy live in Philippines now, however until few years ago, my brother\'s familiy lived in Korea.
>> My brother\'s family lives in the Philippines now. However, until a few years ago, they lived in Korea.
OR >>  My brother\'s family currently resides in the Philippines, but until a few years ago, they lived in Korea.

So, my familiy enjoyed together every holiday like a Chu-Seok.
>> So, my family used to spend every holiday together, like Chu-Seok. 

I took care of my nephews and neices.
>> I took care of my nephews and nieces. 
OR >> I looked after my nephews and nieces.

It was a happy memories.
>> Those are happy memories.

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