write about a time when you felt proud of yourself.

2018-03-21 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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I`m proud of receiving a red cross order. It makes me feel satisfactory. It prove that I tried blood donations at least 30 times. In abbrevating my behaviors, I make an effort to contribute to the society and The red cross organization recognized me. At a first time, I visited dontion house just to get a vouchers. But When i see the volunteers who were publicizing "we need a your blood", My attitude was changed. Eventhough I got a recognition from that organization, I will do donate my blood at least 100 times. It is my aim for the society.

강사 첨삭

Hello JM! Continue doing great things.

Your effort will never go to waste.

See you in class.

~Teacher Shanee^^,


I`m proud of receiving a red cross order.

>>> I\'m proud of being recognized by Red Cross.

It makes me feel satisfactory.

>>> It makes me feel satisfied.
 It prove that I tried blood donations at least 30 times.

>>> I donated blood at least 30 times.
 In abbrevating my behaviors, I make an effort to contribute to the society and The red cross organization recognized me. 

>>>  I make an effort to contribute to the society and the Red Cross organization recognized me.
 At a first time, I visited dontion house just to get a vouchers.

>>> At first, I visited the blood bank to get vouchers.

But When i see the volunteers who were publicizing \"we need a your blood\", My attitude was changed. 

>>> But when I saw the volunteers who were donating blood, I changed my [이름]d.
 Eventhough I got a recognition from that organization, I will do donate my blood at least 100 times. It is my aim for the society.

>>> Even though, I already got a recognition from that organization, I will still donate my blood for at least 100 times. It is way of helping the society.

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