write about a time when you felt proud of yourself.
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Hello JM! Continue doing great things.
Your effort will never go to waste.
See you in class.
~Teacher Shanee^^,
I`m proud of receiving a red cross order.
>>> I\'m proud of being recognized by Red Cross.
It makes me feel satisfactory.
>>> It makes me feel satisfied.
It prove that I tried blood donations at least 30 times.
>>> I donated blood at least 30 times.
In abbrevating my behaviors, I make an effort to contribute to the society and The red cross organization recognized me.
>>> I make an effort to contribute to the society and the Red Cross organization recognized me.
At a first time, I visited dontion house just to get a vouchers.
>>> At first, I visited the blood bank to get vouchers.
But When i see the volunteers who were publicizing \"we need a your blood\", My attitude was changed.
>>> But when I saw the volunteers who were donating blood, I changed my [이름]d.
Eventhough I got a recognition from that organization, I will do donate my blood at least 100 times. It is my aim for the society.
>>> Even though, I already got a recognition from that organization, I will still donate my blood for at least 100 times. It is way of helping the society.
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