Write about ont of your memeorable birthday celebrations.

2024-02-26 · 첨삭 강사 Chammy

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I was so excited that I wrote it too long... I\'m sorry, Charmy!!! I will replace my homework with a text file. Have nice weekend!

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

I\'d rather read a longer composition than one sentence. hehehe... I always appreciate your work, keep it up! I just made some minor corrections particularly the spelling that you should be more mindful of next time.

Chammy

I think the most memorable birthday celebration was when I was in the first grade of elementary school. Birthday celebrations used to be a great opportunity for children to build and share friendships. When I went to other friends\' birthday parties, I thought that I would like to have such a party. I don\'t remember it well, I repeatedly told my mom every day before my birthday, \"I\'m looking forward to a nice birthday party!\" Unfortunately, my birthday was in August, and it was vacation time in Korea. I was so sad because I couldn\'t invite my friends, but I heard the doorbell and I saw my friends and their parents coming in one after another. They came in and said, \"Happy birthday!\" and I was surprised.>>CORRECTSurprisingly, my mom remebered what I said and knew it was vacation, so she contacted each of my friends\' parents and invited them to my birthday party!>>Surprisingly, my mom remembered what I said and knew it was vacation, so she contacted each of my friends\' parents and invited them to my birthday party!
My mom smily said, \"Happy birthday, my baby. It\'s a surprise gift for you!\">>My mom happily said, \"Happy birthday, my baby. It\'s a surprise gift for you!\"
I was depressed but quickly became happy and had a great birthday party with my friends and friends\' parents. It was the most amazing and happiest birthday party of my life.>>CORRECT

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