write about something [material] you received that has been meaningful to you.

2018-05-09 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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It is the most meaningful to receive receipt collections from my girlfriend. Namely she was making a book with receipt. Receipt with comment was written in the book. To be specific, It is role of diary. If we read it, We can be able to remember what we did for 8 years. In addition, Picture which was taken in that place was add to the book. When I see the picture, We keep taking about that place and some stories. And, We joshed changed appearance each other. By these reasons, That book composed of picture and comments is the most important to me.

강사 첨삭

Hi there JM!

How are you? Anyway, thanks for writing this.

I hope you\'ll take note of the corrections I left below.

See you tomorrow!

~Teacher Shanee^^,


It is the most meaningful to receive receipt collections from my girlfriend.

>>> The most meaningful thing I received from my girlfriend is a collection of receipts.

Namely she was making a book with receipt.

>>> Correct!

Receipt with comment was written in the book.

>>>Receipts with comments were pasted on the book.

To be specific, It is role of diary.

>>> To be specific, it\'s like a diary.

If we read it, We can be able to remember what we did for 8 years.

>>> If we read it, we are be able to remember what we did for eight years.
 In addition, Picture which was taken in that place was add to the book.

>>> In addition, pictures taken in that place were added to the book.
 When I see the picture, We keep taking about that place and some stories.

>>> Whenever we see the pictures, we keep talking about the places we\'ve been to and the memories we got from there.

And, We joshed changed appearance each other. 

>>> And we josh about how each other\'s appearance changed.
 By these reasons, That book composed of picture and comments is the most important to me.

>>> For these reasons, that book composed of pictures and comments is the most important to me.

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