Write about the person that you admire the most

2016-01-15 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

When I first got a job, there was a team manager who was my direct boss. He was marvelous in all aspects. He was a great lealer. He knew how to motivate his employees, build teamwork, and work together to achieve company’s goals. His leadership style was not to press or direct his employees using his authoritative power as a manager, but to make them self-start. He was willing to spend his valuable time out of his hectic schedule to couch and help them resolve any issues or difficulties that his team members were facing. He has never yelled at this employees in the office and always maintained a smile on his face. Even if an employee made a mistake, he didn’t condemn or blame him. Instead he has tried to cover-up and protect him. He was a nice person, plus he was smart, intelligent, and generous. He has acute sense of business. He was very creative and always pursued innovation and changes for improvement. When we went on an offsite workshop or picnic, he cooked and did the dishes.

강사 첨삭

T.G.I.F Sir [이름]!

Treat yourself this weekend, take a rest, spend some time with your family and friends.

Wow! You had a good boss!

I am so happy that you met him.
It is really nice that he
never yelled at this employees in the office.

Because in some dramas or movies, a boss usually shouts at his/ her subordinates.
Thanks for sharing about him.

Teacher Nina


When I first got a job, there was a team manager who was my direct boss.

>> correct

He was marvelous in all aspects.

>> correct

He was a great lealer.

>> correct (spelling check: leader ^^)

He knew how to motivate his employees, build teamwork, and work together to achieve company’s goals.

>> correct

His leadership style was not to press or direct his employees using his authoritative power as a manager, but to make them self-start.

>> correct

He was willing to spend his valuable time out of his hectic schedule to couch and help them resolve any issues or difficulties that his team members were facing.

>> correct

He has never yelled at this employees in the office and always maintained a smile on his face.

>> correct

Even if an employee made a mistake, he didn’t condemn or blame him.

>> correct

Instead he has tried to cover-up and protect him.

>> correct

He was a nice person, plus he was smart, intelligent, and generous.

>> correct

He has acute sense of business.

>> correct

He was very creative and always pursued innovation and changes for improvement.

>> correct

When we went on an offsite workshop or picnic, he cooked and did the dishes.

>> correct

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