Write about this topic, \"How Family Traditions Make Christmas Special”.
학생이 쓴 원문
My family had a Christmas routine when my two daughters were young.
The best place to feel Christmas in Korea is the hotel.
My family spent time at the hotel and ate delicious foods and I made plans for the next year.
But now we only share Christmas cards with each other.
Of course, we eat delicious foods.
This year, we spent Christmas separately for the first time.
My wife and two daughters spent their time at the ski resort and I spent my time practicing music.
Now all of my family is an adult, so we need to make a new Christmas tradition.
Tradition must also depend on the environment.
강사 첨삭
Hi David, your message was clear and well-written! It nicely captured your Christmas experiences and how they’ve evolved over the years. I enjoyed the heartfelt tone and the way you shared your reflections on family traditions and adapting to new circumstances. It’s a touching glimpse into your holiday memories. Thanks for sharing!
~ T. Lia
My family had a Christmas routine when my two daughters were young.
>> CORRECT
The best place to feel Christmas in Korea is the hotel.
>> CORRECT
My family spent time at the hotel and ate delicious foods and I made plans for the next year.
>> My family spent time at the hotel, ate delicious food, and I made plans for the next year.
But now we only share Christmas cards with each other.
>> CORRECT
Of course, we eat delicious foods.
>> Of course, we eat delicious food.
This year, we spent Christmas separately for the first time.
>> CORRECT
My wife and two daughters spent their time at the ski resort and I spent my time practicing music.
>> My wife and two daughters spent their time at the ski resort, while I spent mine practicing music.
Now all of my family is an adult, so we need to make a new Christmas tradition.
>> Now that all of my family members are adults, we need to create a new Christmas tradition.
Tradition must also depend on the environment.
>> CORRECT
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