Write about your ultimate dream in life and why?

2015-10-15 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I also wonder what my ultimate dream is. When I ask myself the question, I don’t have clear answers. Indeed, for what am I working and living? Where am I heading to? What will the end of my life look like? At the last moment, how will I evaluate my life when reflecting on the past time I had gone through? Would I be satisfied with how I lived? When I assess my life myself up to date, I would give 80 out of 100 perfect scores. It means that there are many things that I feel regrettable. I should have studied harder in school and made a more effort to develop better personality. I can vaguely say that my ultimate dream in life is to be successful at work and in my personal life. What is success to me? Success doesn’t only mean getting promoted and socially becoming a high profile person, but also getting recognized as a valuable employee regardless of the job position. At home, I want to be a good husband and daughter.In the end, I want myself to be remembered as a warm-hearted person.

강사 첨삭

Great afternoon, Sir [이름]!

For the length of time we\'ve been together, I can say that you are really a warm-hearted person,

You are one of the great people I met. I always learn something from our conversation in class.

I always look forward talking to you everyday. I\'m not kidding. ^.^

I am sure that your wife and your daughter are really proud of you.

I hope that all of your dreams will come true and that you will always be healthy.

Saying thank you wouldn\'t be enough for me to show how grateful I am to be your partner in your English journey.

Have a good day.

See you in class.
Teacher Nina


I also wonder what my ultimate dream is.

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When I ask myself the question, I don’t have clear answers.

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>> OR: When I ask myself that

Indeed, for what am I working and living?

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Where am I heading to?

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What will the end of my life look like?

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At the last moment, how will I evaluate my life when reflecting on the past time I had gone through?

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Would I be satisfied with how I lived?

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When I assess my life myself up to date, I would give 80 out of 100 perfect scores.

>> When I assess my life myself up to date, I would give 80 out of 100 perfect score.

It means that there are many things that I feel regrettable.

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>> OR: It means that there are many things that I regret.

I should have studied harder in school and made a more effort to develop better personality.

>> correct

I can vaguely say that my ultimate dream in life is to be successful at work and in my personal life.

>> correct

What is success to me?

>> correct

Success doesn’t only mean getting promoted and socially becoming a high profile person, but also getting recognized as a valuable employee regardless of the job position.

>> correct

At home, I want to be a good husband and daughter.

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In the end, I want myself to be remembered as a warm-hearted person.

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