Write an essay about a gadget that you have.
학생이 쓴 원문
These years Air Fryer become popular in Korea.
I also bought one a few months ago.
As a office worker I never cook on the weekdays.
And even on the weekends I usually order delivery food or eat out.
After I had a air fryer I cook more often then before.
It cooks using air instead of oil so the food is healthier.
Furthermore it is easy to be handled.
You just need to set the temperature and timer and without watching from the side.
There are many recipes for air fryer.
After I had the air fryer I never user the oven any more.
I think the air fryer bring me a lot of conveniences.
강사 첨삭
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- Teacher Debbie
These years Air Fryer become popular in Korea.
>> correct
I also bought one a few months ago.
I also bought one a few months ago.
>> correct
As a office worker I never cook on the weekdays.
As a office worker I never cook on the weekdays.
>> As an office worker I can\'t cook on weekdays.
And even on the weekends I usually order delivery food or eat out.
And even on the weekends I usually order delivery food or eat out.
>> And even on the weekends, I would usually order delivery food or eat out.
After I had a air fryer I cook more often then before.
After I had a air fryer I cook more often then before.
>> After I had an air fryer I cook more often than before.
It cooks using air instead of oil so the food is healthier.
It cooks using air instead of oil so the food is healthier.
>> correct
Furthermore it is easy to be handled.
Furthermore it is easy to be handled.
>> correct
You just need to set the temperature and timer and without watching from the side.
You just need to set the temperature and timer and without watching from the side.
>> You just need to set the temperature and timer.
>> No need to watch it.
There are many recipes for air fryer.
There are many recipes for air fryer.
>> correct
After I had the air fryer I never user the oven any more.
After I had the air fryer I never user the oven any more.
>> After I had the air fryer, I don\'t use the oven anymore.
I think the air fryer bring me a lot of conveniences.
I think the air fryer bring me a lot of conveniences.
>> I think the air fryer gives me a lot of convenience.
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