write an essay about the movie that inspired you.
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Marver`s hero movies inspired me. To be specific, The main actors like a iron man using the new device in the movies. When i see the scene, I anticipate the future. Maybe, Leading company will challenge to develop similar items. I make sure New device will change the world.
It lead to contribute to more comfortable society.
second, The special effects help me to concentrate on the movies.
When I Saw the movies, I often sleep in the theater. SO, I ponder that why i sleep during watching the movies. I found out without sepcial effects and sound effect, I lost intetests in the movies.
but, Marver`s movie always offer the audience fantastic effects.
It make me feel satisfied.
강사 첨삭
Thanks for writing this JM!
Continue to improve your writing skills, okay?
Happy weekend!
~Teacher Shanee^^,
>>> Marvel\'s hero movies inspired me.
To be specific, The main actors like a iron man using the new device in the movies.
>>> To be specific, I am inspired by the main actors like Iron Man who uses new devices in movies.
When i see the scene, I anticipate the future.
>>> When I see the scene, I anticipate the future.
Maybe, Leading company will challenge to develop similar items.
>>> Maybe, leading companies will be challenged to develop similar items.
I make sure New device will change the world.
>>> I am sure new devices will change the world.
It lead to contribute to more comfortable society.
It lead to contribute to more comfortable society.
>>> It can provide more convenience to society.
second, The special effects help me to concentrate on the movies.
second, The special effects help me to concentrate on the movies.
>>> Second, the special effects help me to concentrate on the movies,.
When I Saw the movies, I often sleep in the theater.
When I Saw the movies, I often sleep in the theater.
>>> When I saw the movies, I often sleep in the theater.
SO, I ponder that why i sleep during watching the movies.
>>> So, I pondered why I always sleep when watching movies.
I found out without sepcial effects and sound effect, I lost intetests in the movies.
>>> I found out that without special effects including the sound effects make me lose my interest in a film.
but, Marver`s movie always offer the audience fantastic effects.
but, Marver`s movie always offer the audience fantastic effects.
>>> But Marvel movies always offer the audience fantastic effects.
It make me feel satisfied.
It make me feel satisfied.
>>> It makes me feel satisfied.
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