Write an essay about your favorite genre of music.

2019-09-05 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

학생이 쓴 원문

When I was in my twenties I used to listen Korean pop song. But these days I only listen to music only while I am driving. While I drive I usually listen to radio and listen the music that the radio plays. On the weekends I like to go to cafes to read books. Most of the cafe play jazz, and I like the music that the shop plays.

강사 첨삭

Great essay ^^ Keep it up!

- Teacher Debbie

When I was in my twenties I used to listen Korean pop song.
>> songs
But these days I only listen to music only while I am driving.
>> correct
While I drive I usually listen to radio and listen the music that the radio plays.
>> While I drive I usually listen to radio and listen to the music that the radio plays.
On the weekends I like to go to cafes to read books.
>> correct
Most of the cafe play jazz, and I like the music that the shop plays.
>> Most of the cafes play jazz and I like what they play.

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