Write an essay about your previous job.
학생이 쓴 원문
Before I move to current company.
I worked for a top 10 Korean company.
It has more than 30,000 employees in the world.
And it\'s the oldest company in Korea.
I worked there as a programmer mainly maintained the dutyfree website.
Maintaining the website includes lunching new features, settling sales, resolving customer complaints through issue checking etc.
I usually went home on time.
But if there were some site attacks I had to work late until the problems solved.
Now, I am also work as programmer.
In order to build up machining learning experiences I move to current company.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for this essay. Kindly check the corrections below:
- Teacher Debbie
>> Before I moved to my current company.
I worked for a top 10 Korean company.
I worked for a top 10 Korean company.
>> I previously worked for a top company in Korea.
It has more than 30,000 employees in the world.
It has more than 30,000 employees in the world.
>> correct
And it\'s the oldest company in Korea.
And it\'s the oldest company in Korea.
>> correct
I worked there as a programmer mainly maintained the dutyfree website.
I worked there as a programmer mainly maintained the dutyfree website.
>> I worked there as a programmer.
>> My main job was to maintain the Duty Free website.
Maintaining the website includes lunching new features, settling sales, resolving customer complaints through issue checking etc.
Maintaining the website includes lunching new features, settling sales, resolving customer complaints through issue checking etc.
>> Maintaining the website includes launching new features, settling sales, resolving customer complaints through issue checking, etc.
I usually went home on time.
I usually went home on time.
>> I usually go home on time.
But if there were some site attacks I had to work late until the problems solved.
But if there were some site attacks I had to work late until the problems solved.
>> But if there were some site attacks, I have to work late until the problems are solved.
Now, I am also work as programmer.
Now, I am also work as programmer.
>> Now, I am still working as a programmer.
In order to build up machining learning experiences I move to current company.
In order to build up machining learning experiences I move to current company.
>> I moved to another company in order to learn new things and have more experiences.
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