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Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing together. To what extent do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?
In today's world , due to advancement of technology , new inventions are coming to existence. ' Necessity is a mother of invention'- the Internet is like a wonder box which contains various information. Moreover, the Internet is considered as a significant method to connect people with one another.
In modernized society, nobody has suffient time to write letters . Besides , it takes longer to send and receive to loved one. The Internet enable people to communucate with each other more comfortably and easily. According to this, young generation mostly prefers to do chatting on the mobile phone via the Internet and sending messages or e-mails. As a result, using the Internet becomes the easiest to connect people to their families and friends.
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강사 첨삭
Ms. [Name], I strongly agree with your ideas about the internet. I will be more than willing to talk more about this tomorrow. Good night! Have a sound sleep. Keep safe and warm.
-Teacher Chloe
Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing together. To what extent do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?
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In today\'s world , due to advancement of technology , new inventions are coming to existence.
>> In today\'s world, due to advancement of technology, new inventions are coming to existence.
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