[writing]13/01/05 Get out of the dorm!!!

2013-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Leny

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Yesterday, I had five works that should do whatever may happen. But I have done only 2 things. Each day, I make schedule to all day at intervals of 30 minutes. Until 2 pm, I had done along plan. But, It was the time in dorm coming back from outing works that everything was messed up. I turned on computer to composite document for assignment of SWA. I loged in website and surfed in sea of gossips... Just gossip, not information... The time flew like an arrow about 4 hours. 4 hours!! 444444!!!!!!! It is enough to finish all things I have to do. If I used this time along my schedule, I'm reading a book what I'm interested in, by now. All this things was done in dorm room. When I get in the room, I put off tension. No, Tension is released from my soul. And It's hard to hold on it. It close to impossible. So, from now, I promise my self. In dorm room, I do only on thing, s[이름]ping. If there is a thing I have to do, I will get out of the room and and go to the library.

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Energetic Monday, Steve! =) You were allowed to do that thing (mistake) for you to learn something. Something that you will never do again because you learned some lessons. I\'m happy that you realized to do things in the most specific places.   When I read the title of your diary, I thought you were being driven out away from your dorm room maybe because you did something bad. I should have been worried about you and that I may have  invited you here in the Philippines. ^___^ I\'ll see you in class dearest one. -Teacher Leny   Yesterday, I had five works that should do whatever may happen. >>> Yesterday, I had five works that I should do whatever happens. But I have done only 2 things. >>> Correct. >>> But I only did two things.Each day, I make schedule to all day at intervals of 30 minutes. >>> Each day, I make a schedule with 30 minutes intervals. Until 2 pm, I had done along plan. >>> Correct.But, It was the time in dorm coming back from outing works that everything was messed up. >>> But, the time I came back to my dorm from an outing, everything that\'s planned was messed up. I turned on computer to composite document for assignment of SWA. >>> I turned the computer to compose document for an assignment at SWA. I loged in website and surfed in sea of gossips... >>> I logged in the website and surfed in a sea of gossip.Just gossip, not information... >>> Correct.The time flew like an arrow for about four hours. >>> Correct. 4 hours!! 444444!!!!!!! >>> Four hours!! ^_^ It is enough to finish all things I have to do. >>> Correct. >>> Four hours should be enough to finish what I have to do. If I used this time along my schedule, I\'m reading a book what I\'m interested in, by now. >>> If only I used this time to do what is scheduled, I should be reading the book which I\'m interested by now.All this things was done in my dorm room. >>> Correct. When I get in the room, I put off tension. >>> Correct. No, tension is released from my soul. >>> Correct. And It\'s hard to hold on it. It close to impossible. >>> Correct.So, from now, I promise my self. >>> Correct. In dorm room, I\'ll do only one thing, s[이름]ping. >>> Correct. If there is a thing I have to do, I will get out of the room and and go to the library. >>> Correct.

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