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Hello [이름],
It doesn뭪 matter how someone spends his or her time. What뭩 more important, is how you make use of it wisely.
- Verna-
I don't do that, I just have a personal time. As I have a personal time, I can keep balance. So , it doesn't need to me now.
>> CORRECT!
As I have a personal time, I can keep balance.
>> Since I have a personal time, I can keep things balanced.
So , it doesn't need to me now.
>> So, I don뭪 need it now.
When I have a time alone, I read books or watch movies... I think palces don't matter.
>> When I have a time alone, I read books or watch movies. I think places doesn't matter.
To me, reading books or doing something that I love to do is same my own time alone.
>>For me, reading books or doing something that I love to do is the same as having my time alone.
Doing whatever I want to do is important.
>> CORRECT!
To me, spending the time for watching movies and reading books is important.
>> For me, spending the time to watch movies and to read books are important.
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