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2015-11-04 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Dear [Name], Good day! I was glad to see you in our class today. By the way, I looked for a meaning of Jeepney on the website and I found the picture and function. Our portal site says that it is a representative transportation in the Philippines and it is considered as a Philippine's symbol. According to the history, American solders left millions of military trucks and Filipinos renovated them to be like a useful public transportation. This Jeepney is not only fast but also cheap. I think it is same with our town shuttle bus here in Korea. What I gathered from the internet, Jeepney can load 15~55 and it depends on its size. When it comes to Jeepney's disadvantages, it is well known that it is noisy and destroy the environment. Because of this bad side, an environment group there in the Philippines is trying to change it to electric car. Those are the information that I got from the website. I hope I can get on that someday.

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Hello, [이름]! You have really searched for the meaning and use of jeepney. I am very satisfied with the information you have given me.^^ It seems like you are now very well informed about it. Let\'s talk more about it in class!^^~~Teacher Erine~~ Dear [Name], >> CorrectGood day! >> CorrectI was glad to see you in our class today. >> Correct By the way, I looked for a meaning of Jeepney on the website and I found the picture and function. >> By the way, I looked for the meaning of Jeepney on the Internet and I found a picture and it\'s function. (Article usage.)Our portal site says that it is a representative transportation in the Philippines and it is considered as a Philippine\'s symbol. >> CorrectAccording to the history, American solders left millions of military trucks and Filipinos renovated them to be like a useful public transportation. >> According to history, American soldiers left millions of military trucks and Filipinons renovated them to be like a useful public transportation. (Spelling) This Jeepney is not only fast but also cheap. >>  Correct I think it is same with our town shuttle bus here in Korea. >> I think it is the same with our town shuttle bus here in Korea. (Use \"the\" with the word \"same\" all the time.)What I gathered from the internet, Jeepney can load 15~55 and it depends on its size. >> I learned from the internet that a jeepney can load 15-55 people depending on its size. (Remember the usage of noun clauses and participial clause)When it comes to Jeepney\'s disadvantages, it is well known that it is noisy and destroy the environment. >> When it comes to its disadvantages, it is well know for being a noisy place and destroys the environment. (collocation: well known for)Because of this bad side, an environment group there in the Philippines is trying to change it to electric car. >> CorrectThose are the information that I got from the website. >> Those are the information I got from the Internet.I hope I can get on that someday. >>  Correct

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