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2017-05-12 · 첨삭 강사 Rain

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1. How can you handle working under pressure? Working well under pressure is a good trait to have, because I can learn tactics to deal with the unnecessary problems. Working under pressure would make me more dedicated to my work. Pressure is a part of my life and life is nothing without pressure and helped me to get more things. 2. How can you handle stress? Everyone get stress from their work. When I get stress from my work, I try to chat with my co-workers. Chatting with my co workers make us understand each other. Also, I drink a cup of coffee. especially Cafe latte so that I can handle my stress. 3. What is your future plan? I will work as long as I can contribute my abilities in your company in the future. I will be well trained as a part of Cabin Crew and I would like to provide my skills to my junior crews in 5 years. I am looking forward to building up my career as a member of your company.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ji [이름]! Happy Friday!^_^

Please some of my revisions on your answer. ^_^

I hope these will help you a lot.

See you on Monday my dear. Take care and have a great time!!

~Teacher Rain~


1. How can you handle working under pressure?
Working well under pressure is a good trait to have, because I can learn tactics to deal with the unnecessary problems. Working under pressure would make me more dedicated to my work. Pressure is a part of my life and life is nothing without pressure and helped me to get more things.
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2. How can you handle stress?

Everyone get stress from their work. When I get stress from my work, I try to chat with my co-workers. Chatting with my co workers make us understand each other. Also, I drink a cup of coffee. especially Cafe latte so that I can handle my stress.

>>Everyone get stressed from their work. I actually work better under pressure or stress and I\'ve found that I enjoy working in a challenging environment. From a personal perspective, I manage stress by talking with my co-workers for us to understand each other or drinking a cup of coffee.  It\'s a great stress reducer.


3. What is your future plan?

I will work as long as I can contribute my abilities in your company in the future. I will be well trained as a part of Cabin Crew and I would like to provide my skills to my junior crews in 5 years. I am looking forward to building up my career as a member of your company.

>>What the future holds for me is still uncertain. However I can see my self working in your company. I will work as long as I can contribute my skills and abilities. For sure, I will be well-trained at that time. I do know that this job will be a great help for me in the future to make decisions.





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