writing contest

Today, we had a writing contest in our school. As a 6th grader, our school's topic was, the decay of korea's society and the way that we can solve these problems. We need to write 700 letters~900 letters in Korean. At first, I was quite shocked because we needed write too much. But as I wrote about this topic, I had so many things to write about so I needed to erase some parts because I wrote about 1000 letters. This was a great experience in writing.

Hello Kevin^^ Good thing you sent your composition once again^^ You have minimal corrections tonight. Check out the following corrections: T' Joan   Today, we had a writing contest in our school. >>CORRECT! OR >> We had a writing contest in our school, today. As a 6th grader, our school's topic was, the decay of korea's society and the way that we can solve these problems. >> As a 6th grader, our school's topic was the decay of Korea's society and the way that we can solve these problems. We need to write 700 letters~900 letters in Korean. >> CORRECT! At first, I was quite shocked because we needed write too much. >> At first I was quite shocked because we needed to write too much. But as I wrote about this topic, I had so many things to write about so I needed to erase some parts because I wrote about 1000 letters. >> CORRECT! This was a great experience in writing. >> CORRECT!