Writing essay - 2/5

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The best thing about my life is happiness.

>> Correct!

I try to be happy.
>> Correct!

There are several ways to be happy.
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First, I study what I want to learn.
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Learning gives me achievement and it makes me feel happy.
>> Learning gives me fulfillment and it makes me happy.

Second, I go other country to travel.

>> Second, I go to other countries and travel.

Seeing the new area and experiencing other culture are exited.
>> Seeing new areas and experiencing other cultures are exciting.

Also, I travel foreign every vacation to feel happiness.

>> Also, I travel to foreign countries every vacation to feel happy.

Third, I take a rest frequently.

>> Correct!

Resr is very important things in my life.

>> Rest is a very important thing in my life.

Enough rest is a driving force of life to try new one.

>> Correct!