Writing Essay(Jun 1st, 2022)

2022-06-02 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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What kind of conflicts/problems have you encountered these days? What did you do to solve it? I was in charge of replacing the whole ceilings of the swimming pool in the Youth Center with new ones this year. So, in January, I contacted a few construction companies to find out if there is one that can carry out the ceiling replacement whithin limiter small budget. However. All the first five companies I contacted sent me the nofifications that they couldn\'t do it with this small amount of budget. I had to do it with the limited budget anyway no matter what happend. So I started writing down all the mobile phone numbers of the people saved in my phone that would somehow seem to know how to solve the problem. When I called 16th person, I could hear the answer that I had wanted to hear. And thanksfully, I could get the job done well!

강사 첨삭

Hi, U [이름]! 

Thank you for sharing about it! 
~T. Roanne ^_^
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I was in charge of replacing the whole ceilings of the swimming pool in the Youth Center with new ones this year. 
>> Correct! 
So, in January, I contacted a few construction companies to find out if there is one that can carry out the ceiling replacement whithin limiter small budget. 
>> So, in January, I contacted a few construction companies to find out if there is one that can carry out the ceiling replacement within limited small budget. 
However. All the first five companies I contacted sent me the nofifications that they couldn\'t do it with this small amount of budget. 
>> However, All the first five companies I contacted sent me the notifications that they couldn\'t do it with this small amount of budget. 
I had to do it with the limited budget anyway no matter what happend. 
>> I had to do it with the limited budget anyway, no matter what happened. 
So I started writing down all the mobile phone numbers of the people saved in my phone that would somehow seem to know how to solve the problem. 
>> Correct! 
When I called 16th person, I could hear the answer that I had wanted to hear. 
>> When I called the 16th person, I could hear the answer that I had wanted to hear. 
And thanksfully, I could get the job done well!
>> And thankfully, I could get the job done well!

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