Writing Exercise: If you could pack only 3 items for your next trip, what would they be?

2022-12-16 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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If I could pack only 3 items for my next trip, i would bring a credit card, smart phone and a passport. Those three items must be carried when we go somewhere. First of all, a passport is needed for proving who i am. Secondly, with a credit card, I could eat, sleep, buy something, enjoy almost everywhere. Lastly, Smart phone can be useful in many ways. Using smart phone, we can take the time to be funny by watching comedy shows and we can also search something. So, i would bring these items for my next trip.

강사 첨삭

Hi Harry!
Thank you for your efforts this week.
I\'m glad that you are consistent in your studies.
I\'m looking forward to better work from you.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
If I could pack only 3 items for my next trip, i would bring a credit card, smart phone and a passport.
>> If I could pack only 3 items for my next trip, I would bring a credit card, my smart phone and passport.
Those three items must be carried when we go somewhere.
>> Correct
First of all, a passport is needed for proving who i am.
>> First of all, a passport is needed as proof of identity.
Secondly, with a credit card, I could eat, sleep, buy something, enjoy almost everywhere.
>> Secondly, with a credit card, I could eat, sleep, buy something and enjoy almost everywhere.
Lastly, Smart phone can be useful in many ways.
>> Lastly, a smart phone can be useful in many ways.
Using smart phone, we can take the time to be funny by watching comedy shows and we can also search something.
>> By using our smart phone, we can take the time to have fun by watching comedy shows and we can also search for information.
So, i would bring these items for my next trip.
>> So, I would bring these items on my next trip.

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