[Writing Exercise] In your opinion, what is the most popular brand of electronics in the world?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think Apple is most popular company in the world. Because, I can see the person using iPhone at least once wherever I go. There are also iPad, iphone and airpot in my house. I think in part of phone and phone accessary Apple is one of the most used electronic brand in the world.
강사 첨삭
Hello there, [이름]!
(^__^)//
I hope you\'re having a good day.
You did a good job!^^ [Company]. is indeed the leading electronics company in terms of revenue.
You\'re an iPhone user so you are well aware of the device\'s strong points.
We can talk about this in class if you want to. See you then!
__T. Mayleen :)
I think Apple is most popular company in the world.
>>> I think Apple is most popular electronics company in the world.
Because, I can see the person using iPhone at least once wherever I go.
>>> It\'s because wherever I go, I can see at least one iPhone user.
There are also iPad, iphone and airpot in my house.
>>> Also, I have an iPad, iPhone and AirPods at home.
I think in part of phone and phone accessary Apple is one of the most used electronic brand in the world.
>>> Thus, for phone and phone accessories, Apple is one of the most used brands of electronics in the world.
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