Writing Homework

2015-05-21 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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If I were asked to send one thing to represent my country in an international exhibition, I would send a Kimchi because it is Korean traditional food and representative food. There are so many kinds of Kimchi and each region has its own Kimchi recipe. It is said that about sixty kinds of Kimchi exists. I think that it is surprising! Kimchi's attractiveness is its taste and texture. Kimchi might be spicy to foreigners, but Korean like the spicy taste of Kimchi because it is helpful when we eat greasy food like pork belly. Also, Kimchi which has just made is crisp, so it feels like we are eating fresh vegetables. Kimchi has been popular gradually and some foreigners enjoy eating it; so, export of Kimchi has been also increased. I think that if Kimchi were exhibited in an international exhibition, it would get popular and make foreigners feels good.

강사 첨삭

Hello Miss [이름]! Thank you for sharing a part of your culture to us. Korean foods are really delicious. Anyway, see you tomorrow. ~Kelly^^ If I were asked to send one thing to represent my country in an international exhibition, I would send a Kimchi because it is Korean traditional food and representative food. >> If I were asked to send one thing to represent my country in an international exhibition, I would send Kimchi because it is a Korean traditional food.There are so many kinds of Kimchi and each region has its own Kimchi recipe. >> Correct. It is said that about sixty kinds of Kimchi exists. >> Correct. I think that it is surprising! Kimchi\'s attractiveness is its taste and texture. >> Correct. Kimchi might be spicy to foreigners, but Korean like the spicy taste of Kimchi because it is helpful when we eat greasy food like pork belly. >> Kimchi might be spicy to foreigners, but Koreans like its spicy taste because it is helpful when we eat greasy food like pork belly. Also, Kimchi which has just made is crisp, so it feels like we are eating fresh vegetables. >> Also, Kim chi is crispy so it feels like we are eating fresh vegetables.Kimchi has been popular gradually and some foreigners enjoy eating it; so, export of Kimchi has been also increased. >> Kim chi has gradually become popular and some foreigners eating it; so, export of Kimchi has also increased. I think that if Kimchi were exhibited in an international exhibition, it would get popular and make foreigners feels good. >> I think that if Kimchi were exhibited in an international exhibition, it would become popular and make foreigners feel good.

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