writing practice-1

Someone used to consider easily that students’ problems are the severe issues from strength to strength. That’s why adults make the rules which can regulate students or adolescents. However we need to deliberate the facts that many regulations can prevent or reduce students’ troubles and deviations rather incite their stuffiness and dissatisfaction. Especially in Korea, the percentage of entering university is above 80% of high school students and this figures is not judged by students’ pure wills to study. This high percentage is only the reflections of social pressure and destruction of students’ distinctive personality in school.

Hello there dear^^ Thank you for sending your writing practice activities. Keep it up... Have a nice day!   writing practice-1 >> correct! Someone used to consider easily that students’ problems are the severe issues from strength to strength. >>Someone used to easily consider student's problems are the severe issues from strength to strength. That’s why adults make the rules which can regulate students or adolescents. >>That is why adults make rules which can be regulated for students or adolescents.  However we need to deliberate the facts that many regulations can prevent or reduce students’ troubles and deviations rather incite their stuffiness and dissatisfaction. >>However, we need to deliberate the facts that many regulations can reduce and prevent students? troubles and deviations rather than incite their stuffiness and dissatisfaction.  Especially in Korea, the percentage of entering university is above 80% of high school students and this figures is not judged by students’ pure wills to study. >>Especially in Korea, the percentage of students entering university id 80% of high school students and this figure is not judged by the student's pure will to study. This high percentage is only the reflections of social pressure and destruction of students’ distinctive personality in school. >>This high percentage is only a reflection of social pressure and destruction of students?distinctive personality in school.