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Some people believe that having a pet such as a cat or a dog helps old people to live a more enjoyable life and to stay healthier.

>>Some people believe that having a pet such as a cat or a dog helps old people live a more enjoyable life and stay healthier.

And I believe that too.

>>correct

When I lived in United stats, I felt lonely. because I couldn\'t speak English fluently, I couldn\'t make friends easily.

>>When I lived in United States, I felt lonely because I couldn\'t speak English fluently, I couldn\'t make friends easily.

But I really want to make friends and talk with foreigners.

>>correct

 One day, I found out a little girl who played with her dog at park. so I decided to buy one.

>>One day, I found a little girl who was playing with her dog at park so I decided to buy one.

after I take it, I could get used to live in state easier than before. And I got confidence also.

>>After I bought a pet, I got used to living in the US easier than before and I also got confidence.

 Because whenever I went to somewhere whit my dog, foreigners came to me and talk to me about my dog.

>>Because whenever I go somewhere with my dog, foreigners come to me and talk to me about my dog.

through this experience, I could improve speaking skill.

>>Through this experience, I could improve my speaking skill.

 Thanks to my dog, I could meet lots of neighbors and felt safe in strange state.

>> Thanks to my dog, I met lots of neighbors and felt safe in a strange state.

hence, I think that pets can help old people to feel happy.

>>Hence, I think that pets can help old people feel happy.

pets can feel human\'s feeling and they would give way to old people.

>>correct

and while old people take care of their pet, they could feel the reason why they keep on staying healthy

>>While old people take care of their pets, they will realize the reason why they keep on staying healthy.