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2023-03-17 · 첨삭 강사 Caitlyn

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One of my military cadre-men is the healthiest person I know. He always exercises in gym. Additionally, he plays soccer and basketball too. He has strong power, flexibility, and endurance. He is positive. He smiles to soldiers everyday. I think he is healthy both physically and mentally.

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday, Robin!
Great job with your composition. Just take note of some corrections like if a person has a positive outlook in life, you can use the word \"optimistic\". Your sentences are really improving. Keep it up.
- T. Caitlyn
One of my military cadre men is the healthiest person I know. 
>> CORRECT
He always exercises in gym. 
>> He always exercises in the gym. 
Additionally, he plays soccer and basketball too. 
>> CORRECT
He has strong power, flexibility, and endurance. 
>> CORRECT
He is positive. 
>> He is optimistic.
He smiles to soldiers everyday. 
>> He smiles at soldiers every day. 
I think he is healthy both physically and mentally.
>> CORRECT

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