Writing task
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that human is the most dangerous factor. And the war is the most brutal event among people. So Ukraine is too dangerous to visit these days. Ukraine and Russia are fighting in Ukraine for 2 years. We can get involved in the war. By the way, I hope that they stop the war now.
강사 첨삭
Happy Friday, Robin!
Wow! You did great in your composition. I can really see that you can express yourself better now. I just added a different way to say some sentences, but overall, all your sentences are correct. Keep it up.
-T. Caitlyn
I think that human is the most dangerous factor.
>> CORRECT
And the war is the most brutal event among people.
>> OR: War is one of the most brutal events that can occur among people.
So Ukraine is too dangerous to visit these days.
>> CORRECT
Ukraine and Russia are fighting in Ukraine for 2 years.
>> OR: The war between Ukraine and Russia in Ukraine has been ongoing for two years.
We can get involved in the war.
>> CORRECT
By the way, I hope that they stop the war now.
>> CORRECT
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