Writing task
학생이 쓴 원문
On June, 2021, I went to Gapyeong with my university student council mates. That place is popular because of the water activities. We could ride on a banana boat. Also, we could jump and slide down the water. It was the first energetic activity for whom cannot enjoy 20 because of the COVID-19. I want to go there again with the same friends.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Robin.
I really appreciate you for doing your homework. Thank you. I think that activity was really fun, especially since you did it with your friends. Just take note that we use \"in\" when referring to a specific month. Great job with your homework.
-T. Caitlyn
On June, 2021, I went to Gapyeong with my university student council mates.
>> In June 2021, I went to Gapyeong with my university student council mates.
That place is popular because of the water activities.
>> CORRECT
We could ride on a banana boat.
>> CORRECT
Also, we could jump and slide down the water.
>> CORRECT
It was the first energetic activity for whom cannot enjoy 20 because of the COVID-19.
>> It was the first active activity that I wasn\'t able to enjoy as soon as I turned 20 because of Covid19.
I want to go there again with the same friends.
>> CORRECT
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