Writing task
학생이 쓴 원문
Sometimes I have to meet acquaintances who be introduced by my parent. They are always older than me, so I must be polite to them. When I am exhausted, I cannot treat them kindly.
Sometimes I want to eat dinner earlier because of starving. But my parent are workers, so they want to wait and eat together. It’s not a serious problem, but it bother me sometimes.
I want to know how connect two different topics naturally.
강사 첨삭
Happy Friday, Robin!
Thank you for doing your homework. In order to connect topics, you can use words like \"also\", \"additionally\", \" apart from this\", \"moreover\", etc.
-T. Caitlyn
Sometimes I have to meet acquaintances who be introduced by my parent.
>> I sometimes have to my parents\' acquaintances that they will introduce to me.
They are always older than me, so I must be polite to them.
>> CORRECT
When I am exhausted, I cannot treat them kindly.
>> CORRECT
Sometimes I want to eat dinner earlier because of starving. But my parent are workers, so they want to wait and eat together.
Sometimes I want to eat dinner earlier because of starving. But my parent are workers, so they want to wait and eat together.
>> Apart from that, there are also times when I want to eat dinner earlier because I am starving and my parents are still at work but I have to wait so we can eat together.
It’s not a serious problem, but it bother me sometimes.
>> It’s not a serious problem but it bothers me sometimes.
I want to know how connect two different topics naturally.
>> I want to know how to connect these two different topics naturally.
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