Writing task
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When I visit Japan, I travelled by metro. In Japan, there is a women only space in metro. I didn’t know about that, so I entered that compartment. All passengers stared at me, and I moved to other compartment rapidly. By this case, I decide to study other countries’ cultures.
강사 첨삭
Happy Birthday, Robin!
Thank you for doing your homework. It is also my first time hearing about that kind of situation in metros in Japan. It\'s nice to know that they give importance to safety and comfort for women.
-T. CaitlinWhen I visit Japan, I travelled by metro.
>> When I visited Japan, I traveled by metro.
In Japan, there is a women only space in metro.
>> In Japan, there is a women-only space in the metro.
I didn’t know about that, so I entered that compartment.
>> CORRECT.
All passengers stared at me, and I moved to other compartment rapidly.
>> All passengers stared at me, and I moved to the other compartment rapidly.
By this case, I decide to study other countries’ cultures.
>> To avoid repeating such cases, I decided to study other countries cultures.
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