Writing task
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the old age is the life of freedom. I can enjoy my hobby using the money which I earned before. However I think we cannot play something active. Elders can only do static hobby such as planting and cooking.
Sometimes, it can be lonely. There is no friend and children near me. I will be needy.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Robin.
You are right. There is more freedom as we get older but the things we can become limited as well. Great job by the way with your homework, you did great with your sentences.
-T. CaitlynI think the old age is the life of freedom.
>> CORRECT
I can enjoy my hobby using the money which I earned before.
>> CORRECT
However I think we cannot play something active.
>> However, I think we cannot play something active.
Elders can only do static hobby such as planting and cooking.
>> Elders can only do static hobbies such as planting and cooking.
Sometimes, it can be lonely.
Sometimes, it can be lonely.
>> CORRECT
There is no friend and children near me.
>> CORRECT
I will be needy.
>> CORRECT
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