Writing task
학생이 쓴 원문
What social problems are associated with old age?
Many elderlies lose their job. However, especially in Korea, there is a weak pension policy. Nowadays, because of the low birth rate, they cannot be guaranteed their pension. The government is organizing occupation for elderly, but it’s still weak and few.
What thing or activity did you like most when you visited Jeju Island?
The last day, very before boarding airplane, my friend and I went to the shore near airport. Only 30minutes left to go but we bought sushi. We also bought soju and ate very fast. At that time, the feeling of wrapping up the trip and tipsy made me happy. I want to re-visit the Jeju Island with my friends.
I couldn’t hand out my homework because the previous class is over so I submit in here.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Robin.
What thing or activity did you like most when you visited Jeju Island?
I couldn’t hand out my homework because the previous class is over so I submit in here.
Thank you for doing your homework. I agree, pension is a very big issue in Korea nowadays and people far from retirement age are already worries about what might happen in the future. Also, thank you for sharing with me the activity that you liked most when you visited Jeju Island.
- T. Caitlyn
What social problems are associated with old age?
>> CORRECT
Many elderlies lose their job.
Many elderlies lose their job.
>> CORRECT
However, especially in Korea, there is a weak pension policy.
>> CORRECT
Nowadays, because of the low birth rate, they cannot be guaranteed their pension.
>> CORRECT
The government is organizing occupation for elderly, but it’s still weak and few.
>> The government is organizing occupations for the elderly, but it’s still unstable and limited.
What thing or activity did you like most when you visited Jeju Island?
>> CORRECT
The last day, very before boarding airplane, my friend and I went to the shore near airport.
The last day, very before boarding airplane, my friend and I went to the shore near airport.
>> On the last day, before boarding the airplane, my friend and I went to the shore near the airport.
Only 30minutes left to go but we bought sushi.
>> There were only 30 minutes left before departure but we still bought sushi.
We also bought soju and ate very fast.
>> We also bought soju and ate hurriedly.
At that time, the feeling of wrapping up the trip and tipsy made me happy.
>> At that time, the feeling of wrapping up the trip and being tipsy made me happy.
I want to re-visit the Jeju Island with my friends.
>> I want to revisit Jeju Island with my friends.
>> I want to revisit Jeju Island with my friends.
I couldn’t hand out my homework because the previous class is over so I submit in here.
>> I couldn’t hand in my homework because the previous class is over so I submitted it here.
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