Writing task
학생이 쓴 원문
My first memory was when I was 4 years old. I wanted to play with my cousins and they were middle school students. They absolutely didn’t want to play with me because I was too young. When they go out, I followed them. However they hid and I lost. I cried and one woman found my parents. I had a necklace which is written parent’s number. I never forget this memory because it’s my first shocked event.
강사 첨삭
Happy Friday, Robin!
I cannot imagine how scared you were during that time. It\'s a good thing that the woman who found you helped you. I also agree that sometimes, traumatic or scary events are those that we tend to remember more.
-T. Caitlyn
My first memory was when I was 4 years old.
>> CORRECT
I wanted to play with my cousins and they were middle school students.
>> CORRECT
They absolutely didn’t want to play with me because I was too young.
>> CORRECT
When they go out, I followed them. However they hid and I lost.
>> Once, they went out and I followed them however, they hid and I got lost.
I cried and one woman found my parents.
>> I cried and a woman helped me find my parents.
I had a necklace which is written parent’s number.
>> I had a necklace where my parent\'s number was written.
I never forget this memory because it’s my first shocked event.
>> I will never forget this memory because it\'s my first shocking event.
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