Writing task
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People can record their history in the art such as song and painting. They represent their cultures and people can establish their independent culture. After making some artworks, they may make or chase the trend. These all process is how being art a part of culture.
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People can record their history in the art such as song and painting.
>>> People can record their history through art such as in music and painting.
They represent their cultures and people can establish their independent culture.
>>> correct
After making some artworks, they may make or chase the trend.
>>> correct
These all process is how being art a part of culture.
>>> All these processes leads to art as a part of the culture.
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