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Yes, I think people have fewer goals as they get older. As they get older, they will satisfy their life. They only hope their children’s health and one more personal wish. They will not be ambitious.
However, I will have a lot of goals when I’m old. I will be start second life with a bunch of my companies. Of course, this goal is from now, so it can be disappeared.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Robin.
Happy Monday. I agree with you. Almost all parents that I\'ve talked to, focus their goals on their kids and asked only for a few things for themselves. That kind of thinking is nice but I think having continuous goals give motivation so it is also important.
-T. Caitlyn
Yes, I think people have fewer goals as they get older.
>> CORRECT
As they get older, they will satisfy their life.
>> As they get older, they find contentment in their life.
They only hope their children’s health and one more personal wish.
>> They only hope for their children’s health and one more personal wish.
They will not be ambitious.
>> CORRECT
However, I will have a lot of goals when I’m old.
However, I will have a lot of goals when I’m old.
>> CORRECT
I will be start second life with a bunch of my companies.
>> I will start my second life with a bunch of companies.
Of course, this goal is from now, so it can be disappeared.
>> Of course, this goal is for now and can change in the future.
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