Writing task

2019-08-14 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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Overpopulation makes many social problems. First, it causes food shortages. The more people there are, the more food they need. However, food resources are limited and cannot keep up with the growing number of people. Therefore, food resources will be depleted in the not-too-distant future. Second, overpopulation leads to a lack of jobs. Overpopulation is a same meaning that more people are looking for jobs. As a result, it causes a lot of unemployed people.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, Lily! ^-^

Happy Wednesday!

Thank you for sharing your thoughts regarding the topic.

You did a good job here.^^ It\'s your holiday tomorrow. Have a good time.

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_T. Mayleen :)


Overpopulation makes many social problems.

>>> Overpopulation leads to many social problems.

First, it causes food shortages.

>>> Correct!

>>> First, it leads to famine.

The more people there are, the more food they need.

>>> Correct!

>>> OR: The higher the population, the more food supply needed.

However, food resources are limited and cannot keep up with the growing number of people.

>>> Correct!

Therefore, food resources will be depleted in the not-too-distant future.

>>> Correct!

Second, overpopulation leads to a lack of jobs.

>>> Second, overpopulation increases the rate of unemployment.

Overpopulation is a same meaning that more people are looking for jobs.

>>> The number job opportunities/vacancies is less than the number of job seekers.

As a result, it causes a lot of unemployed people.

>>> As a result, a lot of people are unemployed.

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