writing task

Good evening, Lily! ^-^)

We didn\'t have our class today, but I hope you\'re doing fine.

You did a good job in answering your homework.

However, I have made some modifications for you to review later on.

_T. Mayleen :)

I think having a dream is important to us.

>>> CORRECT

First, dream makes people stimulate their sense of purpose.

>>> First, dreams stimulate people\'s sense of purpose.

It is a good affect to them because they can live their life more active.

>>> It has a good effect because they can live their life more actively.

Second, people who have own dream can get higher success than others.

>>> Second, people who have their own dream can be more successful than others.

So we have to have our own dream to live better life.

>>> That\'s why we have to have our own dream to live life better.