Writing Task(Apr 13th, 2022)

2022-04-18 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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What do you think is interesting about your culture? Definitely, I would say about K-POP. When I was a teenage, like my friends, I used to dance and sing to the songs of many popular Idol groups. Thirty years ago when I was ten, there was less than 20 Idol singers as long as I remember. However, I and even my nephews and nieces who are now teenagers don\'t know how many Idol singers there are these days. I read an article about the young boys and girls who have been training to debut as a singer and the number of them is over a millions. What\'s worse is that the article I read showed the statistic in 2016. So, I guess there surely would be more than 1.5millions Idol tranees nowadays.

강사 첨삭

Hi, U [이름]!

Thank you for sharing your ideas about it and for sharing about your culture. Talk to you later~

T. Roanne ^_^
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Definitely, I would say about K-POP. 
>> Correct!
When I was a teenage, like my friends, I used to dance and sing to the songs of many popular Idol groups. 
>> When I was a teenager, like my friends, I used to dance and sing to the songs of many popular Idol groups. 
Thirty years ago when I was ten, there was less than 20 Idol singers as long as I remember. 
>> Correct!
However, I and even my nephews and nieces who are now teenagers don\'t know how many Idol singers there are these days. 
>> Correct!
I read an article about the young boys and girls who have been training to debut as a singer and the number of them is over a millions. 
>> I read an article about the young boys and girls who have been trained to debut as a singer and the number of them is over a million. 
What\'s worse is that the article I read showed the statistic in 2016. 
>> Correct!
So, I guess there surely would be more than 1.5millions Idol tranees nowadays.
>>So, I guess there surely would be more than 1.5 millions Idol trainees nowadays.

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