Writing Task (Feb 11th, 2022)
학생이 쓴 원문
What do you have in your bucket list?
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I’ve always been just thinking that “I want to do this, I want to do that.” But without no action plans. That was the problem.
However, this year will be totally different from the previous years because I’m gonna make action plans and will definitely take actions for achieving my goal.
And here is my bucket list. Only one ; Buying a super can, a yellow Lamborghini Aventador
Whenever I imagine myself getting on this yellow super car, I feel every single cell of my body excited. The fact that I own the car means a lot ; I have already succeeded in my area, running my own business ; I can give anything to the people who need my help.
In 2022, I’ll try my best to learn English, get the information to found an English Education Company Online. Even though the English Education Market is already fully saturated, what I want to do is not just only for making money, but for educating the children in poverty using another profit-making system.
강사 첨삭
Good day, U [이름]!
Wow! That is a very nice garden you have in your workplace! Thank you for showing it to me. Let me share you the beach were I went during the weekend. It\'s a famous tourist spot here in Cebu! I hope you can visit here with your family one day!
Well, I hope you can achieve and have that super car you have always wanted. Cheering for you!!!
Talk to you later~
~T. Roanne ^_^
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I’ve always been just thinking that “I want to do this, I want to do that.” But without no action plans. That was the problem.
>> I’ve always been just thinking that “I want to do this, I want to do that.” But with no actual plans. That was the problem.
However, this year will be totally different from the previous years because I’m gonna make action plans and will definitely take actions for achieving my goal.
However, this year will be totally different from the previous years because I’m gonna make action plans and will definitely take actions for achieving my goal.
>>However, this year will be totally different from the previous years because I’m gonna make action plans and will definitely take action for achieving my goal.
And here is my bucket list. Only one ; Buying a super can, a yellow Lamborghini Aventador.
And here is my bucket list. Only one ; Buying a super can, a yellow Lamborghini Aventador.
>>And here is my bucket list. Only one ; Buying a super car, a yellow Lamborghini Aventador.
Whenever I imagine myself getting on this yellow super car, I feel every single cell of my body excited.
Whenever I imagine myself getting on this yellow super car, I feel every single cell of my body excited.
>> Whenever I imagine myself getting in this yellow super car, I feel every single cell of my body excited.
The fact that I own the car means a lot ; I have already succeeded in my area, running my own business ; I can give anything to the people who need my help.
>>The fact that I own the car means a lot; I have already succeeded in my area, running my own business; I can give anything to the people who need my help.
In 2022, I’ll try my best to learn English, get the information to found an English Education Company Online.
In 2022, I’ll try my best to learn English, get the information to found an English Education Company Online.
>> In 2022, I’ll try my best to learn English, get the information founding an English Education Company Online.
Even though the English Education Market is already fully saturated, what I want to do is not just only for making money, but for educating the children in poverty using another profit-making system.
>> Correct!
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