Writing Task(Feb 23th, 2022)

2022-02-23 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

학생이 쓴 원문

Describe your dream house. >> The house I would live in is the one that oversees the ocean. I love Marvel Cinematic Universe, Especially, who started this whole universe, which is The Iron Man. I attatched the picture of his house you can see in The Iron Man 2. Since I live far from the sea, whenever I go to the beach I think that I want to live near beach. And so do my lovely two woman. And of course, with the garage, which has a big space in it enough to store the Super Cars. And it would be great if it were fully equipped with artificial intelligence system. Every morning if I wake up and say “Open the curtain”, the curtain opens by itself recognizing my voice.

강사 첨삭

Hi, U [이름]!

Wow! That is indeed a nice plan and nice place to live. I know that you are striving hard to achieve your dreams. May it all be granted someday! ^^

Thank you for sharing!

~T. Roanne ^_^
===============================================
The house I would live in is the one that oversees the ocean. 
>> Correct!
I love Marvel Cinematic Universe, Especially, who started this whole universe, which is The Iron Man. 
>> Correct!
I attatched the picture of his house you can see in The Iron Man 2.
>> I attached the picture of his house you can see in The Iron Man 2.
Since I live far from the sea, whenever I go to the beach I think that I want to live near beach. And so do my lovely two woman.
>>Since I live far from the sea, whenever I go to the beach I think that I want to live near the beach. And so do my lovely two women.
And of course, with the garage, which has a big space in it enough to store the Super Cars. 
>> Correct!
And it would be great if it were fully equipped with artificial intelligence system.
>> And it would be great if it were fully equipped with an artificial intelligence system.
Every morning if I wake up and say “Open the curtain”, the curtain opens by itself recognizing my voice.
>> Correct!

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·