Writing Task(Feb 27th, 2022)
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Bungee jumping?>>
I do hate bungee jumping.
I loved to ride the rides at the amusement park.
I wrote in past tense “LOVED”
15 years ago, when I was riding a Viking ride. I remember the moment vividly. When the Viking started going up, swinging back and forth, for the first twenty, thirty second I enjoyed it very much. But I suddenly felt a great pain in my chest and could hardly breath. And my eye sight went slowly and I passe out since. When I opened my eyes, I noticed my friends who I went with were all beside me, some talking to the operator of the ride and some making phone calls to 119. But a few minutes later, I passe out again. When I opened my eyes again, I found myself on the bed transported by an ambulance. I was diagnosed with cardiac arrhythmia. The doctor asked me to ride the Viking ride again with an equipment on my chest so that it could record every symptom of my heart during riding and he could analyse the reaction of my heart with the data. I replied “Are you insane?”
강사 첨삭
Hi, U [이름]!
Wow! That\'s totally an insane thing to ask a weird question from a doctor. I guess, I understand why wouldn\'t try it. It\'s really not safe for you to try extreme sports activities due to your condition. Just make sure to keep yourself safe and healthy all the time. Let go of all your worries because it\'s also not good for your health. Just enjoy life and what it gives you.
Thank you for sharing and have a nice day!
~T. Roanne ^_^
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I do hate bungee jumping.
>> Correct!
I loved to ride the rides at the amusement park.
I loved to ride the rides at the amusement park.
>> Correct!
I wrote in past tense “LOVED”
I wrote in past tense “LOVED”
>> Correct!
15 years ago, when I was riding a Viking ride. I remember the moment vividly.
15 years ago, when I was riding a Viking ride. I remember the moment vividly.
>> Correct!
When the Viking started going up, swinging back and forth, for the first twenty, thirty second I enjoyed it very much.
>> Correct!
But I suddenly felt a great pain in my chest and could hardly breath.
>> Correct!
And my eye sight went slowly and I passe out since.
>> And my eyesight went slowly and I have passed out from.
When I opened my eyes, I noticed my friends who I went with were all beside me, some talking to the operator of the ride and some making phone calls to 119.
>> Correct!
But a few minutes later, I passe out again.
>> But a few minutes later, I passed out again.
When I opened my eyes again, I found myself on the bed transported by an ambulance.
>> Correct!
I was diagnosed with cardiac arrhythmia.
>> Correct!
The doctor asked me to ride the Viking ride again with an equipment on my chest so that it could record every symptom of my heart during riding and he could analyse the reaction of my heart with the data.
>> The doctor asked me to ride the Viking ride again with an equipment on my chest so that it could record every symptom of my heart during riding and he could analyze the reaction of my heart with the data.
I replied “Are you insane?”
>> Correct!
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