Writing Task(Jul 4th, 2022)

2022-07-06 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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Do you think that money can buy happiness? Yes. I think that money can buy happiness. the meaning of that,as far as I define it as, is that I can be happy with money. No. Actually, everyone knows \"MONEY CAN BUY HAPPINESS\" And the more I have, the happier I would be. Some people say \"Money can not make us happy itself. There\'s something more important than money\". However, the chances are the people who say this must be the ones who don\'t have enough and don\'t even try to earn more money, sacrificing their instant gratifications and paying the price. And this is what I heard on a YouTube clip on the way home today, in the evening. We know dozens of people who are kind to everyone and help others with their full heart. But it is obvious that most of them are poor or live under the average life, in the aspects of how much money they have.

강사 첨삭

Hi, U [이름]! 

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one. Have a good rest!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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Yes. I think that money can buy happiness. 
>> Correct! 
the meaning of that,as far as I define it as, is that I can be happy with money.
>> The meaning of that, as far as I define it as, is that I can be happy with money.
No. Actually, everyone knows \"MONEY CAN BUY HAPPINESS\" And the more I have, the happier I would be. 
>> No. Actually, everyone knows \"MONEY CAN BUY HAPPINESS\" And the more I have, the happier I would be. 
Some people say \"Money can not make us happy itself. 
>> Correct! 
There\'s something more important than money\". 
>> Correct! 
However, the chances are the people who say this must be the ones who don\'t have enough and don\'t even try to earn more money, sacrificing their instant gratifications and paying the price.
>> Correct! 
And this is what I heard on a YouTube clip on the way home today, in the evening. 
>> Correct! 
We know dozens of people who are kind to everyone and help others with their full heart. 
>> Correct! 
But it is obvious that most of them are poor or live under the average life, in the aspects of how much money they have.
>> Correct! 

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