Writing Task(Jun 30th, 2022)
학생이 쓴 원문
What is your birthday wish for this year?
I didn\'t have time to wish anything for since my birthday was actually the day my daughter and her friends blew the candle lights. We lighted the candles a few time so that the children could enjoy the moments, blowing the lights. On my birthday, I invited the families of my daughter\'s friends to my house.
But my wish this year is the one that has always been my first wish every year : all three of us being in a healthy condition. Recent days, I heard some sad news from my aquaintances about their bad health conditions. That is why I started running and jogging about a month ago in the early morning.
강사 첨삭
Hi, U [이름]!
That\'s a good wish. I hope your wish may be true. Always keep yourself healthy and fit because it is very important.
Thank you for sharing!
~T. Roanne ^_^
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I didn\'t have time to wish anything for since my birthday was actually the day my daughter and her friends blew the candle lights.
>> I didn\'t have time to wish anything for since my birthday since it was actually the day my daughter and her friends blew the candle lights.
We lighted the candles a few time so that the children could enjoy the moments, blowing the lights.
>> We lit the candles a few times so that the children could enjoy the moments, blowing the lights.
On my birthday, I invited the families of my daughter\'s friends to my house.
>> Correct!
But my wish this year is the one that has always been my first wish every year : all three of us being in a healthy condition.
But my wish this year is the one that has always been my first wish every year : all three of us being in a healthy condition.
>> But my wish this year is the one that has always been my first wish every year: all three of us are in a healthy condition.
Recent days, I heard some sad news from my aquaintances about their bad health conditions.
>> Recent days, I heard some sad news from my acquaintances about their bad health conditions.
That is why I started running and jogging about a month ago in the early morning.
>> Correct!
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