Writing Task(Mar 15th, 2022)
학생이 쓴 원문
Does your happiness depend on the behavior of others?
It’s hard to say that my happiness doesn’t depend on the others’ behavior because I sometimes got hurt in a relationship with others. And I know there’s no exception for a human. The difference is how much a person depends on the others in his life. If you think you are depending on the others a lot, your happiness or your unhappiness cannot help but be affected by their words, facial expressions, tones of the voice. And the more you like the person or a group of people, the more you get affected by them, either positively or negatively.
I know I’m just one of them. I’m weak and get hurt easily. However, I’m also trying not to get influenced too easily by others’ opinions.
강사 첨삭
Hi, U [이름]!
Thank you so much for still making an effort to give feedbacks, even though you are not in a good condition right now. I am hoping that you feel better soon as well as your family.
Have a good rest!
~T. Roanne ^_^
=========================================
It’s hard to say that my happiness doesn’t depend on the others’ behavior because I sometimes got hurt in a relationship with others.
>>Correct!
And I know there’s no exception for a human.
>>Correct!
The difference is how much a person depends on the others in his life.
>>Correct!
If you think you are depending on the others a lot, your happiness or your unhappiness cannot help but be affected by their words, facial expressions, tones of the voice.
>>If you think you are depending on the others a lot, your happiness or your unhappiness cannot help but be affected by their words, facial expressions and tones of the voice.
And the more you like the person or a group of people, the more you get affected by them, either positively or negatively.
>>Correct!
I know I’m just one of them. I’m weak and get hurt easily. >>Correct!
However, I’m also trying not to get influenced too easily by others’ opinions.
>>Correct!
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.