Writing Task (Mar 1th, 2022)
학생이 쓴 원문
If you could change one thing in the world, what would it be?
>>
The Climate Change, Russia’s invasion into Ukraine, the conflicts in the Middle East, and etc. All these are the problems that we all should be interested in and try to tackle together. And I really hope that all these are solved!
However, before I tell something that I want change, I have to try to change myself to change the world.
If I want the climate issues solved, for instance, I have to separate the trash. I have to separate the trash into the waste can not be recycled, the one that can be recycled and food.
강사 첨삭
Hi, U [이름]!
Well, indeed that is true. If we want change to happen then we should start it ourselves. The climate change has been one of the biggest problems we have in this world and in order to heal the world, we should be doing something about it.
Thank you for sharing and have a great night!
~T. Roanne ^_^
==================================================
The Climate Change, Russia’s invasion into Ukraine, the conflicts in the Middle East, and etc.
>> Correct!
All these are the problems that we all should be interested in and try to tackle together.
>> Correct!
And I really hope that all these are solved!
>> Correct!
However, before I tell something that I want change, I have to try to change myself to change the world.
However, before I tell something that I want change, I have to try to change myself to change the world.
>> However, before I say something about what I want to change, I have to try to change myself to change the world.
If I want the climate issues solved, for instance, I have to separate the trash.
>> Correct!
I have to separate the trash into the waste can not be recycled, the one that can be recycled and food.
>> I have to separate the trash into the waste that cannot be recycled, the one that can be recycled and food.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.