Writing Task(Mar 22th, 2022)
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What are the advantages or disadvantages of modern medicine?
One advantage is that we can get over easily in a short period with modern medicine. There’re millions of drugs we can buy at a drugstore or even at a convenience store.
However, the disadvantage comes from the same fact that we can buy nearly any medicine within 10 minutes, no matter where we are. Human body needs a kind of symptoms, like high fever, cough, soar throat, ant etc as a way of self cure and a certain level of immunity. But buying and taking the medicine easily, we don’t allow our bodies to have those symptoms that are necessary to strength self-defense and immune system.
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Good day, U [이름]!
You are right! Having the modern medicine makes it easier for us to access it, especially during the emergencies. We should also not be too dependent on medicines because it can weaken our body at the same time.
Thank you for sharing!
~T. Roanne ^_^
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One advantage is that we can get over easily in a short period with modern medicine.
>> Correct!
There’re millions of drugs we can buy at a drugstore or even at a convenience store.
>> Correct!
However, the disadvantage comes from the same fact that we can buy nearly any medicine within 10 minutes, no matter where we are.
However, the disadvantage comes from the same fact that we can buy nearly any medicine within 10 minutes, no matter where we are.
>> Correct!
Human body needs a kind of symptoms, like high fever, cough, soar throat, ant etc as a way of self cure and a certain level of immunity.
>> The human body needs a kind of symptoms, like high fever, cough, sore throat, ant etc. as a way of self cure and a certain level of immunity.
But buying and taking the medicine easily, we don’t allow our bodies to have those symptoms that are necessary to strength self-defense and immune system.
>> But buying and taking the medicine easily, we don’t allow our bodies to have those symptoms that are necessary to strengthen self-defense and immune system
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